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As I stood alone, admits the rose garden, delicate fingers fluttering over the petal of a particularly small specimen, I understood all that was around me. In that one simple moment all became clear, and I held that moment close to me. Have you ever felt it, that one second that everything makes sense? But then of course, it faded. I no longer could see the future nor understand the past.
All that knowledge, torn away like the petal of the rose that I touched, for it died from that simple brush. As I watched it crumble, dry out and die, my eyes began to tear. Long lines of silver, falling down my cheeks, for I understood I would someday die as well. But should I fear this? This immortal power that showed no mercy when tearing a baby from its mothers arms, yet allowed the old to fall peacefully asleep in night’s warm grasp.
No, but of course I have my human tendencies. Like everyone else in this world, I feel things, fear things, and sometimes even love things. So I shall keep my fears suppressed, knowing I am not the only one depressed.
©2003-2009 ~obsidiantear
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This is beautiful... Just beautiful. WHAT is wrong with you people!? This is the most beautiful thing I've read on Deviant art. I have read a lot, and this one is BY far my favorite! This is heavy with deep emotions, near enough to make one's self tear with te words... Keep it up Anna.... I'd like to see more like this... +favs
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I agree that this is an extremely beautiful piece of writing. Interesting point of view and insightful topic. 5 stars! (sorry, been watching too much Star Search lately).

one point:
"my eyes began to tear."

I dont really like the word "tear" there... when someone's eye's are "tearing" I usually this of them doing this from wind or something caught in their eye, not sorrow, not crying. Perhaps a different word... or something more figurative such as "spill over"?
I don't know.

Lovely. lovely, lovely.

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Love, Ceci
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What I like about this poem is the comparison of the rose's delicate and simple existence compared with the too complicated and too short lives of us humans. Sad in both prospects but poems and writing such as this are what make me attempt to love my life for as long as I live it. Enjoy my presence on this sad earth and do mor ethan simply... take up space. I love... *nod/hug*

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Life is delayed, and through eyes of glass I watch it fall asunder. -Dakota
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Great depth. Very nice work, indeed.

Ninja Fella xTheRavenx Ninja Fella

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The funniest thing I've read in a while:
chown -R us ./base
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And you're how old? 13. I'm very very impressed. You seem very mature. I'm intrigued, and I'll be checkin' out some more of your stuff.
:icondeathsuxdontdie:
great job. it's got imagry and emotion that is planly visable yet wrapped witht deeper meaning. it's a wonderful piece of work.
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wowie.

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We're all pawns, my dear.
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"This immortal power that showed no mercy when tearing a baby from its mothers arms, yet allowed the old to fall peacefully asleep in night’s warm grasp. "

you're truly an insightful person.. really.. wow..
Again i am left speechless by your writing.. so.. full.. full of emotion and meaning and ..wow..


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Grace - God's Redemtion At Christ's Expense.

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this is beutiful.....

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